Issue 8144: Section: 11.1 (uml2-rtf) Source: (, ) Nature: Clarification Severity: Minor Summary: Typos and rewording requests Basic Concepts para 2 - Change "Behavior" to "Behaviors" Basic Concepts para 3 - Change "Operations" to "Operation calls" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 1 - change "various action primitive actions" to "various primitive actions" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 3 - rewrite to something like: S"pecifically, a single primitive action is defined so that it either carries out a computation or accesses object memory, but never both." Intermediate Concepts para 6 sentence 4 - Add verb in "multiplicity bound ignored" to "multiplicity bound is ignored" Intermediate Concepts para 6 last sentence - replace the pronoun "these" with the appropriate noun - I don't know if "these" refers to the points where the lower multiplicity bound is ignored or the points where the modeler has determined that the lower multiplicity bound is enforced. Intermediate Actions, Read Write Actions (page 230) para 3 sentence 1 - needs rewording: "ranging from" implies a "to" something which is not listed; "implementation-dependent" is a modifiying phrase but I don't know what it is modifying (the following comma may not be needed). My interpretation of the sentence meaning is: "Value specificationc cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent constants to complex expressions with possible side-effects." Resolution: Revised Text: Typos 1 => ok Typo 2 (i.e. Change "Operations" to "Operation calls")=> nok => it is really operations and not operation calls that are specified in the model. But BTW, in Basic Concepts para 3 sentence 1, one could change “behaviour invocation” to “behaviour invocations” to align with previous “operations calls” and “signal sends”. Typo 3 => ok Typo 4 => why not (but as I am not English native speaker, I am not very the right man to judge that nut it seems to me, a french guy, it is better ;-) Typo 5 => ok Typo 6 => nok => I think that in this case there is no ambiguities, “these” refers to the closes expression, in this the points where the modeler has determined that the lower multiplicity bound is enforced. Typo 7 => ok Revised Text: Section 11.1, p.229, sub section “Basic concepts”: para2, sentence1: change “Behavior" to "Behaviors” Editor’s note: fixed in formal copy edit para3, sentence1: change “behaviour invocation” to “behaviour invocations” Section 11.1, p.229, sub section “Intermediate Concepts”, para1: sentence 1 - change “various action primitive actions” to “various primitive actions”. sentences 2&3 - change “Specifically, primitive actions are defined so that they either carry out a computation or access object memory, and never both.” to “Specifically, a single primitive action is defined so that it either carries out a computation or accesses object memory, but never both.” Editor’s note: I reworded the proposed change slightly for readability Section11.1, p.230, sub section “Intermediate Concepts”, para6, sentence4: change “multiplicity bound ignored” to “multiplicity bound is ignored” Editor’s note: fixed in formal copy edit Section11.1, p230, sub section “Intermediate Actions, Read Write Actions”, para3, sentence 1 – change “Value specifications cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent, constants, and complex expressions, even with side-effects.” with “Value specification cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent constants to complex expressions with possible side-effects.” Actions taken: January 27, 2005: received issue August 23, 2006: closed issue Discussion: End of Annotations:===== m: webmaster@omg.org Date: 27 Jan 2005 10:12:11 -0500 To: Subject: Issue/Bug Report -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Name: Jane Messenger Company: U. S. Geological Survey mailFrom: jmessenger@usgs.gov Notification: Yes Specification: Superstructure Section: 11.1 FormalNumber: ptc/04-10-02 Version: 2.0 Draft Adopted RevisionDate: 10/08/2004 Page: 229-230 Nature: Clarification Severity: Minor HTTP User Agent: Mozilla/4.0 (compatible; MSIE 6.0; Windows NT 5.0; Q312461) Description Typos and rewording requests Basic Concepts para 2 - Change "Behavior" to "Behaviors" Basic Concepts para 3 - Change "Operations" to "Operation calls" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 1 - change "various action primitive actions" to "various primitive actions" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 3 - rewrite to something like: S"pecifically, a single primitive action is defined so that it either carries out a computation or accesses object memory, but never both." Intermediate Concepts para 6 sentence 4 - Add verb in "multiplicity bound ignored" to "multiplicity bound is ignored" Intermediate Concepts para 6 last sentence - replace the pronoun "these" with the appropriate noun - I don't know if "these" refers to the points where the lower multiplicity bound is ignored or the points where the modeler has determined that the lower multiplicity bound is enforced. Intermediate Actions, Read Write Actions (page 230) para 3 sentence 1 - needs rewording: "ranging from" implies a "to" something which is not listed; "implementation-dependent" is a modifiying phrase but I don't know what it is modifying (the following comma may not be needed). My interpretation of the sentence meaning is: "Value specificationc cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent constants to complex expressions with possible side-effects." Issue 8144: Section: 11.1 Source: Jane Messenger (U. S. Geological Survey, jmessenger@usgs.gov) Nature: Clarification Severity: Minor Summary: Typos and rewording requests Basic Concepts para 2 - Change "Behavior" to "Behaviors" Basic Concepts para 3 - Change "Operations" to "Operation calls" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 1 - change "various action primitive actions" to "various primitive actions" Intermediate Concepts para 1 sentence 3 - rewrite to something like: Specifically, a single primitive action is defined so that it either carries out a computation or accesses object memory, but never both." Intermediate Concepts para 6 sentence 4 - Add verb in "multiplicity bound ignored" to "multiplicity bound is ignored" Intermediate Concepts para 6 last sentence - replace the pronoun "these" with the appropriate noun - I don't know if "these" refers to the points where the lower multiplicity bound is ignored or the points where the modeler has determined that the lower multiplicity bound is enforced. Intermediate Actions, Read Write Actions (page 230) para 3 sentence 1 - needs rewording: "ranging from" implies a "to" something which is not listed; "implementation-dependent" is a modifiying phrase but I don't know what it is modifying (the following comma may not be needed). My interpretation of the sentence meaning is: "Value specification cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent constants to complex expressions with possible side-effects." Discussion: Typos 1 => ok Typo 2 (i.e. Change "Operations" to "Operation calls")=> nok => it is really operations and not operation calls that are specified in the model. But BTW, in Basic Concepts para 3 sentence 1, one could change .behaviour invocation. to .behaviour invocations. to align with previous .operations calls. and .signal sends.. Typo 3 => ok Typo 4 => why not (but as I am not English native speaker, I am not very the right man to judge that nut it seems to me, a french guy, it is better ;-) Typo 5 => ok Typo 6 => nok => I think that in this case there is no ambiguities, .these. refers to the closes expression, in this the points where the modeler has determined that the lower multiplicity bound is enforced. Typo 7 => ok Revised Text: Section 11.1, p.229, sub section .Basic concepts.: para2, sentence1: change .Behavior" to "Behaviors. para3, sentence1: change .behaviour invocation. to .behaviour invocations. Section 11.1, p.229, sub section .Intermediate Concepts., para1: sentence 1 - change .various action primitive actions. to .various primitive actions.. sentences 2&3 - change .Specifically, primitive actions are defined so that they either carry out a computation or access object memory, and never both.. to .Specifically, a single primitive action is defined so that it either carries out a computation or accesses object memory, but never both.. Section11.1, p.230, sub section .Intermediate Concepts., para6, sentence4: change .multiplicity bound ignored. to .multiplicity bound is ignored. Section11.1, p230, sub section .Intermediate Actions, Read Write Actions., para3, sentence 1 . change .Value specifications cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent, constants, and complex expressions, even with side-effects.. with .Value specification cover various expressions ranging from implementation-dependent constants to complex expressions with possible side-effects.. Resolution: Resolved